写作与思考2019technologyreview.com
我让学生交上手机，并就此写一篇文章
I asked my students to turn in their cell phones and write about it
导读
一位教师要求学生交出手机并在无手机状态下上课、写作，再把观察写成文章。这篇讨论值得写作者一读，因为它示范了一个常见写作陷阱：先把结论（手机毁了专注力）定好，再把课堂现象都解释成证据。评论区从教学结构、信息获取方式和个人实验三个角度提出了反驳，正好可用来练习如何检验自己的论点。
可以直接用的写作要点
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学生说“读不懂书”时，作者直接归因于手机，这是写作中的“结论先行”：下判断前先列出两三个替代解释并逐一排除。
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把亲身体验当作论据时要说清条件：那位一周不用手机的评论者，因为交代了具体做法和意外发现，说服力远胜抽象的感慨。
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区分“我观察到的现象”和“我推断的原因”，前者可以写得很具体，后者必须留有余地，否则读者一句反问就能推翻全文。
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别把结构性问题（课堂形式、考试制度）简化为个人自律问题；指出系统层面的原因，文章才更有分量。
HN 评论精选
作者跳过了学生给出的真实原因；问题可能出在教学形式和信息技能，而不是手机。
我不理解他为什么在学生说明“读不懂书里的词”之后才去做这个实验。社交媒体过度争夺注意力确实有道理，但教育结构本身也有很大责任：让一个人对着上百人讲一小时，对多数人并非好的学习方式。而且现在“记住内容去应付闭卷考试”已不是有用技能——手机几乎能瞬间查到任何信息，重要的是如何查找、核实和使用信息。
jon889查看英文原文
I don't understand why he decided to do his experiment after the students told him it was because they didn't understand the words in the book. But anyway, I think some of this is true that things like social media have gone to far in attracting our attention. But also a lot of blame is with the structure of education. Listening to one person for at least an hour with sometimes a hundred other people in the room is not a good way of learning, at least not for everyone. Also learning to remember to complete a closed book exam is not a useful skill anymore. One of the good things about phones is that almost any information can be found almost instantly almost anywhere. No need to remember formulas or dates. Instead how to find information, verify it, and use it is far more important.
提醒读者警惕作者预设的价值立场：论点可能只是旧偏见的重复。
这位作者一向以抱怨现代教育和看低学生著称。学生读不懂他指定的书，他却回应说问题出在手机上，这并不令人意外。
wllknj查看英文原文
The author is best known for complaining about modern education and having a low opinion of his students. The fact that he would respond to students not understanding the book he assigned by telling them their phones are the problem is unsurprising. Here is a pretty good summary of his MO which apparently hasn't changed much since a few years ago. https://hookandeye.ca/2016/03/23/the-unbearable-privilege-of-cynicism/
用亲身实验支持“手机减少偶发人际交流”这一面，同时不否认文章其他问题。
我对文章本身有很多意见，但因亲自做过这个实验，完全认同核心信息。两个月前我为伦理课和另一位同学一起一周不用手机。不能在走路时听播客、有声书和音乐，我一周内卷入的对话比平常多得多。我意识到自己虽不觉得上瘾，但一直戴耳机确实错过了许多独特的交流。
MperorM查看英文原文
While I take a lot of issues with the article itself, I concur the core message completely due to having done the experiment myself. Two months ago I gave up my phone for a week, for a class on ethics along with a single other student. Not being able to listen to podcasts, audiobooks, and music everywhere I go, I fell into so many more conversations than I normally would in a week. what I realized was that, while I didn't feel addicted to my phone I definitely was missing out on a lot of unique interactions by wearing headphones everywhere I went.
如果写作只为取悦评分者，由此产生的自我报告数据就未必可信。
以我的教育经历，你常常是为了“讨好”老师而写作，而不是表达自己（如果你想拿到应有的学位）。所以我个人不太相信文中那些数字。
wnzl查看英文原文
My experience with education is that you are often forced to write in order "to please" the teacher, rather than express yourself (if you want the proper degree). So personally I do not really believe in any of those numbers. Edit: At least not on academic level, there I think it looks bit differently.
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